35.Two writing samples produced by 11th-graders at TNFSH are provided below. Based on your understanding of the writing assessment criteria used by the College Entrance Examination Center (CEEC), conduct a diagnostic analysis of these texts by identifying three major problems at the macro (global) level (e.g., organization, coherence, development of ideas, etc.) and three problems at the micro (local) level (e.g., grammar, vocabulary use, sentence structure, mechanics, etc.). Drawing on your analysis, propose specific instructional strategies you would implement in your writing class to address these issues and explain how these strategies could help students improve their performance under the CEEC writing criteria.

Your response must include: 

(1) analysis of three macro- and three micro-level issues with the writing,

(2) proposal and explanation of specific instructional strategies with relevant examples.

 

Writing sample 1

     Some people think high school students should have part-time jobs, but others disagree. In my opinion, students should not work while they are studying in high school.

First, high school students already have a lot of homework and exams. If they have part-lime jobs, they may feel very tired and have less time to study. As a result, their grades may become

worse.

     Second, many students do not know how to manage their time well. If they work after school, they may spend less time doing homework or preparing for tests. This may affect their academic

performance.

     Finally, students should spend more time developing their interests and abilities. They can join clubs, play sports, or participate in school activities. These experiences may be more helpful for

their future than eaming a small amount of money.

     For these reasons, I think high school students should focus on their studies instead of having part-time jobs.

Writing sample 2

     Nowadays many high school students want to have part-time jobs. Some people think it is a good idea, but others think students should focus on their studies.

     In my opinion, having a part-time job has both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, students can learn how to communicate with other people and become more responsible. They can also eam some money and reduce their parents' financial burden.

     On the other hand, working part-time may affect students' school performance. If students spend too much time working, they may not have enough time to study or rest.

Therefore, high school students should carefully consider their situation before deciding whether to have a part-time job.