IV. Correcting writing: (20%)The following is a passage written by an 11th
-grader. Please correct it and give some
feedback and suggestions.
Student’s work:
Many people think travel is a kind of entertainment and they only travel in their free
time. Others consider travel as a way to release stress. Still others regard travel as a
way to show off on social media. As for me, I like to travel for the precious
opportunity to learn. While traveling, I can enjoy incredible landscapes, which are
different from my native country. Sometimes, travel enlightens me to see things in
perspective and teaches me philosophy of life. These memories are unforgettable
and will be cherished for the rest of my life. Last but not least, what I learn from
traveling cannot be found in the book. Travel allows the knowledge I’ve gained in
school to be applied in real life.
Teacher’s suggestions: