申論題

第二題
The following is an example of some student’s composition. Please follow grading rubrics from CEEC and (1) grade this writing (0~20), (2) correct the mistakes, (3) analyze the weaknesses in the writing, and (4) make a general comment and provide suggestions for this student to improve his/her writing skill.
作文練習題目：
請以理想中的居住環境為題。敘述你理想中的居住環境應具備什麼?
學生作文:
        I always love to enjoy my daly life. It’s important for me to live in my ideal neighborhood. A park for exersice is absolutely necessary. I often exercise which makes me feel that I am still energetic. Also, it is vital that families having pets should have a place to walk puppies. If it remains enough room, I hope that I could have a basketball court near my home. I might need a gym, too. It must be good to see the live show. Professional devices may help me build a good body.
       In addition to the enviroment, I think it is better to have kind neighbors. I love social activities, because I am a passionate guy love to make friends. My neighbors must be good at cooking. I can be happy just because of a plate of cake! I hope my neighbors are funny, too. Humerous people will form a positive community, so we can be healthy not only physically but also mentally. The above description is my ideal neighborhood.