申論題

The following is a passage written by an 11th -grader. Please correct it and give some feedback and suggestions. 

 Student’s work：

Many people think travel is a kind of entertainment and they only travel in their free time. Others consider travel as a way to release stress. Still others regard travel as a way to show off on social media. As for me, I like to travel for the precious opportunity to learn. While traveling, I can enjoy incredible landscapes, which are different from my native country. Sometimes, travel enlightens me to see things in perspective and teaches me philosophy of life. These memories are unforgettable and will be cherished for the rest of my life. Last but not least, what I learn from traveling cannot be found in the book. Travel allows the knowledge I’ve gained in school to be applied in real life.

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